You Raised Me Up
They lived to love…
They ran around, in mustard fields of beauty;
They sang around, cuddled and were playful... cheery;
The golden drapes of the sun wrapped them in peace;
The pristine moon kept them away from grief.
And he said…
We need hunger to live…
You are my hunger.
When I am down, you turn up,
And make me ever stronger.
You raise me up, so I can stand on mountains;
You raise me up, to walk on stormy seas;
I am strong, when I am on your side.
You raise me up… To more than can be.
And she said…
You don’t take my breath away;
But you are my breath;
You make my heart beat;
You make my life straight.
When I am down and, oh my soul, so weary;
When trouble comes and my heart burdened be;
Then, I am still and wait here in silence;
Until you come and sit awhile with me.
But the social barriers kept them in…
For she was the heiress, and he a mere common;
Their blossoms were considered a sin,
It tied them… tried to bring a bond of disharmony.
She stood tall, success beneath her.
He lay small, failed in life… downtrodden.
Yet they stood for each other…
Their bond kept them strong, their love warm.
And when… the day of union came…
He bowed to her… and on his knees he asked…
Will you marry me?
Her eyes stared into his… the lips parted
And she spoke…
You don’t suit me.
He turned around, tears drowning him down;
Walked back the path he had taken;
Walked ahead till he reached,
The destination where he wanted to be.
And he said…
You raised me up, so I can stand on mountains;
You raised me up to walk on stormy seas;
So here I am, standing on top of this mountain,
Submitting myself to the stormy seas…
There is no life… no life without hunger,
And now my hunger is gone,
So I drown it in the eternity…
The swelling oceans of lone.
He closed his book of life…
Author's Note - I want you all to evaluate this poem and think and tell me, why do you think she declined his proposal even after all the love?
Looking forward to your comments and reviews.
See you all soon...
posted by Aersh @ 11:39 AM
15 Comments:
At June 30, 2009 2:17 PM ,
priya said...
u kno i am so bad at finding out reasons.and these feelings r 2 complex 4 me. so ask sucho.but the poem was nice. u kno i feel ur poems r much much better than ur stories.and why should the boy die coz f a stpd girl if she was proud of her money or watever.the boy didint lose nethng it was the gal who lost her luv.so the ending didnt suit me.
At June 30, 2009 3:41 PM ,
Paromita said...
Well this is how I feel. A human being always looks for security, peace and happiness in life. Love might be a wonderful emotion but only beautiful thoughts and moments can not build a secure future. He always keeps talking like a loser, asking her to raise him up instead of doing it himself let alone provide for her. He doesn't even try and stays a loser, till the very end where he gives his life. She truly loved him but his losing nature steals the security in their relationship and along with that happiness and peace.Being already provided for she choses security and leaves him( inspite of being devasted herself, i m sure) and bears the pain like a winner. She has a hidden hope that on being left by her with those words her lover would struggle, persevere and be successful and claim her love after that while she would wait. But he gives his life and proves himself to be a loser not capable of accepting rejection. And thus ends their love story...
At June 30, 2009 4:47 PM ,
Samyukta said...
Lovely poem..the harsh truth will always hurt.A relationship is always abt trust n not love..the girl never trusted the guy.its pretti hard to live ur life alone...@paromita:I guess he didn mean "raising up" literally.Whether ya admit or not..in love..ur always expecting.expecting ur partner to love u,trust u..HOLD YOU wheneva u fall..n thts wat it meant i guess..a strength.a meaning to life.i myself hav experienced such days..searching for a light in the darkness..the weak needs support..not sympathy.the guy dsnt always have to be stronger like tht of in a fairytale...she supported him thro think n thin..n thn chose her own lifestyle.place the guy in the gal's place n the gal in the guy's place in the poem..u'l feel pity on the gal thn..he was searching his light.yeah! i agree "suicide" is nt the answer...bt the life he had left wasn't worth living either!
At June 30, 2009 5:42 PM ,
guru niki :) said...
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At June 30, 2009 10:22 PM ,
Prithwish said...
Well written. Powerful, evokes emotions.
Why she did it? Why she refused after all the love? It's tough to say. How a woman's mind works, contrary to popular belief, isn't all that different from a man's. Only difference? Women ARE "practical" nowadays, and wouldn't think twice about rejecting someone if she felt he would be DETRIMENTAL to her career or to her living a comfortable, GOOD life.
And thats it, I guess.
At July 1, 2009 12:20 AM ,
Ain Hoss --> Move on man... said...
aersh...nice poem dude!
suicide is not the solution cuz true love still waits for the guy even as he drifts into nothingness. imagine the gal made for u being spent son sumone else cuz u were stupid enough to not find her.
in this poem the gal is like...really really stupid. cuz i have seen. i have seen how much pain she would have taken if she would have gone with the guy. how much trouble she might have faced...but in the end she would be satisfied.
u know why?
cuz in the end of the day when she sits and rests for a moment or two and asks herself what is the meaning of life and what is the meaning of living it...she it would find its answer in the boy.
what is life if you don't live for someone else?
degrading and painful in the end...
At July 1, 2009 6:44 AM ,
abhi said...
well...a poem that Prithwish should like...but I disagree a bit with Paromita because the girl got the success but never earned it by herself. It is a 'success' that the girl got as a 'heiress'.
I don't feel you have to be 'successful' to show your love. But the factor that prevented the girl from marriage is may be the fear of the rift that may arise in future due to the economic division.
But at the end I agree with Priya more and consider the girl a 'complex' character (and not deserving to the boy) and the boy as a stupid fellow (as they are most of the time) who confined his domain of life so narrow and limited.
Your prose is still better than your poems Aersh...try to think beyond the prototypes...
At July 1, 2009 8:24 AM ,
sucharita said...
i really liked it very much u know i saw a thai movie d day before wich was so similar to this one.in ur story may b d girl had nevr tiein a knot wid him evr evn tho she loved him love alwaz does not mean to marry.but somtyms sincere love evn doesnt end up in marriage.may b d girl just liked him as a frd.or may b she thot it wud ruin both of their lyfs latr.none of them wud evr be able to satisfy eachothr.but its true if u r lovn somone genuinli u can cross all barriers but evry one is not so genuine as the two in the gift of the magi.but ur poem is indeed a loveli piece.
At July 3, 2009 12:28 PM ,
Mohammed Musthafa said...
hey....really nice poem...better than ur previous one in my opinion...as for the girl....well, there cud be so many reasons....status problem...fear of commitment...she didnt actually like the guy...it was jus the guy's misguided sense of hope...
anyways....wht is the right reason in ur mind?
At July 6, 2009 12:16 AM ,
Aparna said...
exceptionally well written!!
i didn't quite expect the ending
i think the girl wanted to provoke him to do something useful, to prove himself to the world
but he just misunterpreted ans misunderstood her love and took a wrong decision to kill himself
At July 9, 2009 7:03 PM ,
PRIYASHA said...
I really din know dat my friend's bcum such a gr8 poet. Keep it up!
At August 10, 2009 10:46 PM ,
juvenile` said...
Its like one of the best poems I've read :)
At September 25, 2009 4:13 PM ,
divsi said...
very very very beautiful!:)
the expressions got a vivid image of it in my mind! lovely!
At February 22, 2010 5:24 PM ,
miroku ikeda said...
gr8 poem dude....
i think that the girl only thought about her status and social image other than nething else.... she was mean..... it might also be that she didn't hav ne other thing to do so she used the guy for time pass but da guy took it as love...as is always da case.... he became dependent on da girl.... nd he asked for marriage but da girl denied him.... nd unable to bear it he killed himself.....
girls (not all maybe) at present r really mean...nd dis poem brings da fact out excellently......
At March 29, 2011 2:29 AM ,
Anonymous said...
Good poem ...like the words but why the death ...god might have had other plans for the boy
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